Once upon a time there was a baseball player playing in a new pro league called the S.O.S. baseball. His name was Speedy Flea. Your probably wondering way he has that name. He is as fast as lightning and he can turn into a flea.
Speedy Flea would practice 24/7. Sometimes he would exercise so much he weigh 1,000,000 pounds in muscle. Those pounds helped him in his pitching. It also helped him hit the ball farther, but if the ball didn’t go over the fence he would be slower. So he’d have to tern into a flea.
One day after a game that his team won he got jumped. He got a concussion and his right arm and leg was broken. The day of the big game he was still lying in the hospital bed watching the game. Suddenly, he had a remarkable thought. He was going to play as the flea.
His team was up to bat in the bottom of the eighth. Speedy was up to bat with two outs and the bases loaded. He hit a grounder to the pitcher and the pitchers throw the ball home. The ump said the guy was out. The top of the ninth went 3 up 3 down. In the bottom of the ninth Speedy Flea was up to bat with two outs and the bases loaded again. The count was three two full. Speedy Flea hit a grand slam for a walk off home run. His team won the game and got the biggest trophy they ever saw.
So at the end everything turned out great at the end. His concussion got better and his right arm and leg healed. He is now playing in the MLB as Babe Ruth not Speedy Flea.
Dear Zebra fish 07,
ReplyDeleteI like the way you tied your main character to real life by saying he was Babe Ruth. I thought that was a really good idea. The way you use the word end in the first sentence in the last paragraph was a little confusing. It would also be nice if you could hold back on the highlighter that would be very nice because it hurt my story.
Sincerely,
Zebra fish 03
To zebrafish007,
ReplyDeleteThat was a very entertaining story. i liked how you changed his name at the end. But it kind of rambled a bit.
From zebrafish010
Dear Zebrafish#007
ReplyDeleteYour story needs more juicy actions and details. More adventure.
From Charlie A. Jones (Zebrafish#016)